2013-2014最新版COMMON APP美国大学通用申请表教程
【最大的变革:Essay】
“通用申请(Common Applica-tion)”是美国大学本科入学网上申请的一站式网站,美国包括哈佛、耶鲁、普林斯顿等名校在内的400多所美国大学都使用这一系统。
2013年8月1日起,新版美国大学本科通用申请(简称CA)启用。其中申请作文题(Essays),不仅题目做了彻底调整,而且在字数上做了严格限制。新题目对申请学生的审题、写作能力、思想表达的成熟度提出了更新更高更严的要求。
【Essay字数要求的变化】
新版的通用申请表对申请作文题(Essays)篇幅做了严格的限制,要求字数必须在250-650字之间。
相较于旧版本,申请文字数要求是250-500字之间,但是如果字数超过的话,可以通过Word或PDF形式将文章上传。新版本的这项改变,加强了申请的公平性,同时这项改变对那些篇幅掌控度比较弱,无法在规定字数内完整而深入地展示自己的学生也将带来必然的影响。
【Essay题目的变化】
旧版本题目有6个,基本围绕“国家或国际上的议题”、“对你影响最大的人”等话题;
新版本取消了自选题目,题目数量减少为5个,并更多集中在“你的观点”、“你的成长”、“你的所学所获”等方面。
新版本
Instructions. The essay demonstrates your ability to write clearly and concisely on a selected topic and helps you distinguish yourself in your own voice. What do you want the readers of your application to know about you apart from courses, grades, and test scores? Choose the option that best helps you answer that question and write an essay of no more than 650 words, using the prompt to inspire and structure your response. Remember: 650 words is your limit, not your goal. Use the full range if you need it, but don't feel obligated to do so. (The application won't accept a response shorter than 250 words.)
§ Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
你是否有“使你之所以是你”的某种背景或者某个故事,你认为这个故事在你的申请里是一定不可缺少的。如果有,那么请跟我们分享你的故事。
§ Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what lessons did you learn?
请叙述你的一次失败经历或一段低谷时期,它是如何影响你的,你又从中学到了些什么?
§ Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again?
请回想你曾经挑战某个信念或观点的时刻。当时是什么促使你那样做的?如果重来一回,你是否还会做出同样的决定?
§ Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?
请描述一个让你由衷感到快乐的地点或环境,你在那里做了些什么又经历了些什么,为什么那对你来说是意义非凡的?
§ Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal, that marked your transition from childhood to adulthood within your culture, community, or family?
请论述你取得的某项成就或者所经历的某个事件,正式或者非正式都可,它标志着你在自己的文化,社会或家庭背景下如何从一个孩子成长为大人?
美国大学倾向于招收综合素质优秀的学生,因此这次的Essays的改革是最彻底也最能体现美国大学招生的实质需求。新版的通用申请表中藉着有深度的题目,使学生的思想、观点和心智成熟度在回答中得到最大化展现,更加凸显了公平和客观,有助于招生院校透过申请作文的回答深入全面地了解申请者,录取到自己最满意的人选。
关于各学校的Supplemental Essay
1. 关于academic interest
本科文书并不像研究生那样非要把专业研究得太透彻,也不必非得展示出自己具备很强的研究能力。对于这种本科essay,我们只要从学生的兴趣和所参加过的活动入手就可以了,除非学生真的参加过某个科技创新活动,并且确实有过专利等突出表现。例如,一个申请营养学专业的学生可以从孩子喜欢烹饪的角度写;一个申请生物或者植物学的学生,可以写他从小对花花草草的喜爱。下面是几种常见的问法。
(1)In an essay of 300 words or less, please discuss your academic interests and/or professional goals. (UIUC)
(2)If you are interested in pursuing a B.S.E. (Bachelor of Science in Engineering) degree, please write an essay describing why you are interested in studying engineering, any experiences in or exposure to engineering you have had, and how you think the programs in engineering offered at Princeton suit your particular interests. (Princeton University)
(3)With the understanding that the choice of academic school you indicated is not binding, explain why you are applying to that particular school of study. (Rice University)
2. 关于一次难忘的、比较重要的经历
这样的题目有可能是问你的一次成功的经历,也有可能会让你描述一个自己曾经经历过的失败或者挑战。在回答这种题目的时候,我们中国的学生在选材的时候容易陷入一个误区,我们往往认为只有那些惊天动地的壮举,才可以算作是成功的经历,但却脱离了生活。其实,越贴近生活的事情,就越容易打动别人。我们之前曾经写过两篇类似的文书,一篇是写一个酷爱物理和电学的高中生,在母亲节的时候给妈妈亲手制作了一个非常简易的半导体,“能够永远让妈妈露出开心的笑容,是我一生最大的成就”!这其实只是一个生活中的小事,但却很容易感动别人。另外一篇,是说一个高大健壮的男生,性格却十分腼腆。有一次,班里要求所有同学必须参加话剧演出,他最终克服了自己内心的恐惧和羞怯,勇敢的登上了舞台,并且通过自己的刻苦练习,最终表演成功。这个例子的好处在于,体现了学生用于挑战自我,改变自我的性格。
建议大家在处理这类题目的时候,选择一些非常贴近生活,非常真实的小事,并且通过这个小事能体现出学生如何客服种种困难,最终取得满意的结果的过程,就够了。读完之后,让人马上能记住这个学生,就是一篇好文章。下面是几种常见题型:
(1)Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
(2)Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging. (250 words) (Stanford University)
(3)Meliora: 'Ever better' - The University's motto, Meliora, directs our focus toward continual improvement through research, understanding, and collaborative efforts. Offer and example from your personal experience of an obstacle you faced or a problem you identified. Describe the actions you took and the result. (一千字符以内)(U of Rochester)
3. 关于以你自己为中心、开放式的题目(无明确内容要求,可随意发挥)
这种开放式的题目也很常见,让学生描述自己成长的环境,可以是家庭,可以使社区,也可以是学校,并说明这个环境对学生的影响。这种题目在选材的时候比较自由,但需要注意的是,一定要从一个比较独特的视角去谈,切忌落俗套,千篇一律。我们之前给来自唐山的一个学生写过一篇essay,描写了76年大地震后,自己的家乡是如何经受住考验,自己家乡的人民是如何重建家园,并且以一种感恩的心去回馈整个社会对自己的帮助。唐山人民这种奋斗和不服输的精神也感染了学生,文章就刻画了学生坚强、独立、乐观的形象。最后,学生想要学习经济学的原因是想要benefit the people of the world。
开放性题目的问法也很多,例如:
类型1
(1)Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. (University of California System)
(2)There is a Quaker saying: ''Let your life speak.'' Describe the environment in which you were raised--your family, home, neighborhood or community--and how it influenced the person you are today. (200-250 words,2000字符以内) (Tufts University)
类型2
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate- and us - know you better. (Stanford University)
4. 关于你能给学校带来哪些贡献
The University of Washington seeks to create a community of students richly diverse in cultural backgrounds, experiences, and viewpoints. How would you contribute to this community? (UW-Seattle)
很多题目是问:“你能给我们的多元化发展带来哪些贡献?”我们中国学生在提供素材的时候,往往容易陷入另一个误区,总是以中国传统文化为依据去选材。可是随着中国学生在美国的数量日益增加,学校早已厌倦了这种关于琴棋书画的文章,也不指望将来在美国校园展开书法或者国画比赛等活动。学校只是希望通过这个题目,去更深入的了解学生。所以我们在写的时候,可以稍微转换一下角度,从学生的成长环境、家庭背景、文化背景入手。例如,我们曾经服务过一个来自内蒙古的学生,文书当中就充分利用了学生独特的文化背景,将蒙古狼的坚韧品质与学生的性格结合起来。整片文章刻画了学生与狼一样坚韧的性格,追梦想,遇到困难不轻易放弃的精神,使AO 相信学生会成为一个优秀的学生,并给大学的多元文化带来贡献。
另外,对于“贡献”的理解,也存在偏差。有很多学生,在提供素材的时候说到:“我曾经在某个银行实习了2个月,我对中国银行和金融服务业的观察和反思,是我能带来的贡献。”这种事例显得过于牵强了,毕竟2个月的实习本身含金量就容易让人怀疑,而且这么短的时间,很难深入了解某个领域。其实关于“贡献”,我们可以换一个角度思考。比如,我们写过的一个学生,提供素材的时候说自己喜欢看电影,并且在给当地一个高中做支教的时候,把英文电影欣赏带入了课堂。像Forrest Gump, Seasons of Giving, The Bucket List等电影里传达出的那种积极向上的生活态度,给那些贫困地区的中学生带来了希望和追求梦想的动力。文章最后提到“Gradually, I have become the director of the movie that is my life: I see any difficulty and success, hardship and excitement as an episode, which makes my life rich and full. And this positive perspective towards life is what I want to bring to my overseas study.”
虽然美国本科申请的essay topic 每年都不一样,但我们写作的原则是始终不变的,既be honest, unique, and yourself。希望本文可以帮助那些正在准备申请和挑战美国名校的学生们更好地在申请文书当中展现一个真实的、独特的自己。
【写Essay 的几个建议】
1. 简洁性。新版Common Application 要求文章字数在250-650字,所以那些篇幅掌控度比较弱,无法在规定字数内完整而深入地展示自己的学生可能需要提高一下这方面的水平。
2. 真实性。不要夸大你的成就、头衔或者你所在的部门。仅仅一个报社编辑或者绿色俱乐部的会计就足够了,而不是什么社长或者主席。任何一个人都不是每方面的天才,如果不是过度膨胀自己的成就,也许你会感觉更好一些。
3. 个性。在写文章的时候,问一下你自己,“在成千上百的申请者中,包括我不认识的与我认识的人,我应该怎样让自己与众不同?”那不在于你的活动或者兴趣。如果你从高中直接进入了大学,你只是一个青少年,在做青少年该做的事情。让你真正与众不同的是你的思想以及它如何使你脱颖而出。你认为呢?很显然,这是很难解释的,但是这是你区别于别人的最关键的因素。
4. 连贯性。很显然,我们都不想在文章里喋喋不休,但是我的意思是写文章要只针对一个主题来写,不要在一篇文章里涵盖各个方面,这样做可能会表现出你在各方面都很忙,但是同时,你的文章也会显得很散乱,很肤浅。整个申请过程就是你的活动的一系列快照。所以不可避免的就会不完整。但是大学要的就是这种效果,所以跟随他们的思路就好了。
5. 精确性。精确性的意思不只是要检查拼写。一篇好的文章还需要注意标点符号的正确使用,如逗号、分号等等。如果你要写Dickens,就不要写Wuthering Heights(呼啸山庄);如果你要写Nietzsche,就请把他的名字拼写正确。
6. 生动性。一篇好的文章经常可以比作是一则故事。在很多情况下,它是发生在一个很重要的瞬间的奇闻轶事。请提供一些细节让读者来了解故事的背景,对故事里的人要使用他们的名字,包括你的哥哥、你的老师或者你的教练。这样会使你的文章更加人性化,也会向读者展现你正在考虑他们对你的文章是否欣赏,当然你肯定希望别人会给出肯定的答案。
7. 要表现出你可爱的一面。大学经常把它们自己看成一个小社会,人们必须要和别人相处交流,无论是在宿舍里还是在班级里。你是那个他们想共进晚餐,一起闲逛或者一起讨论的人吗?想一下,“我该怎样和别人交流而不是像个乡巴佬似地只站在一边听别人讲呢?”敏锐一些还是好的。
8. 幽默表达要谨慎。你永远不知道不相识的人对你的反应,尤其是当你讲一些比较幽默的事情的时候。幽默往往是旁听者所感觉出来的,所以,除非你觉得不得不来一些幽默的东西,否则会很可笑。对于幽默的使用,要仔细考虑。
9. 尽量写有争议性的话题。很多学生会写一些站不住脚的枯燥乏味的文章。只要你权衡了利弊并且考虑清楚了,就可以写一些严肃的话题,如政治或者宗教。不要装作你知道最后的事实,也不要只是对于一个敏感的话题信口开河。对于你的观点,要给出一些合理的根据,同时还要考虑其他的观点。大学是一个观点激烈交锋的地方,并且招生官喜欢思想的多样性。
10. 尽量表现聪明的一面。大学是一个充满智慧的地方,甚至在谈论他们宿舍,爬墙或者你可以参加多少活动时,他们都会保守秘密。表现出你智慧的一面是很有帮助的。你的思想里现在出现了什么?那不是你要宣读的要选的专业,真正重要的是为什么这个专业让你感兴趣。
下面举一些2012年美国留学新生申请的部分essay:
1. 杜兰大学:
By using this application, you are not required to submit a formal essay. However, we do ask that you write a personal statement (at least 250 words) – allowing Tulane to get an idea of who you are beyond your grades, classes and test scores. If there’s any information you would like the admission committee to take into consideration when reviewing your application, this is the place for it.
2.弗吉尼亚理工:
You may respond to up to three of the personal statements below (choose one, two, three, or none) as you feel they support your individual application. Please limit your statement(s) to no more than 250 words in length (each).
1. What are the top five reasons you want to attend Virginia Tech?
2. If there is something you think would be beneficial for the Admissions Committee to know as we review your academic history, please take this opportunity to explain.
3. What do you consider the greatest benefit(s) of a diverse educational community?
4. Describe five unique or interesting things about yourself.
5. Free response - writing sample.
6. Which of your current or previous teachers do you admire most, and why?
7. Describe how a world event has helped to shape the person you are today.
3.密歇根州立大学:
As part of your application for admission, a personal statement is required. Michigan State University is interested in learning more about your background, talents, and experiences and how you plan to apply them to your MSU education and future. Your statement may be considered as a positive factor to enhance your admissibility, as well as for scholarship consideration. Choose one of the personal essay topics below and write a short essay of up to 400 words. 个人陈述是入学申请的必要材料。密歇根州立大学(MSU)希望更多地了解你的背景、才能和经历以及你是如何准备将这些(就是你的背景、才能和经历)应用于你在MSU 的学习和你的未来。你的陈述会对你的录取和奖学金申请起积极作用。请任选下列一题写一篇不超过400 英语单词的短论文。
Briefly discuss an activity or organization that you have participated in, or are currently participating in, outside of your own cultural group. 简略讨论你曾经参加或目前正在参加的不同于你的文化背景的一项活动或一个组织。
If admitted to Michigan State, you will join a diverse community of students, faculty, staff, and alumni. Please respond to the following hypothetical situation: In your first-semester English course you are assigned a group writing project to be completed within a week. In addition to yourself, your group is comprised of five other students, some of whom are from different countries and/or have different racial/ethnic backgrounds than you. Please explain how your past life experiences will help you effectively collaborate with your group members in order to achieve success on this project.
如果你被MSU 录取,你将融入一个由学生、老师、员工和校友组成的多元群体。请回答下面假设的问题:你在第一学期的英语课中分到一个小组写作项目,该项目需要在一周内完成。除了你以外,你的小组还有其他五名组员,他们有些人来自与你不同的国家和/或具有与你不同的人种/种族背景。请说明你过去的生活经历将如何帮助你有效地与你的组员合作从而取得该项目的成功。
If you feel that your high school record does not accurately represent your academic abilities, please explain why. Include and discuss particular extenuating circumstances that may have contributed to any scholastic challenges. 如果你认为你的高中成绩不能准确地反映你的学术能力,
那么请你说明一下理由。你需要例举和解释情有可原的特殊情况,而正是这些情况造成了你在学术上的困境。
4.俄亥俄州立大学
a.why are you considering the ohio state university 你为什么会考虑去俄亥俄州立大学?
b.,As you think about the next four years, what are you looking forward to that might surprise your friends or family members?想想将来的4 年,你期待什么能给你的朋友或者家人一个惊喜呢?
5.普渡大学-西拉法叶
Essay--Statement of 250-1,000 words. Choose one:Describe how a Purdue education will help you achieve your personal and/or professional goals.
Envision yourself near the end of a fulfilling, lifelong career and you just published your autobiography. Share the title and introduction.
Imagine being able to join a conversation between any two people, living or deceased.
Describe that conversation. Identify the people and topic and express what you were able to contribute and/or what you learned.
Respond to only ONE of the above topics in the space provided to the right.
6. 佐治亚大学:
All four essays on the following pages are required for application submission.
Essay A
Choose an intellectual or creative opportunity (for example, community involvement, a summer program, a unique project, travel abroad, etc.) from your high school years that you have enjoyed and highlight how you have grown personally because of the experience. (200 Word Limit)
Essay B
"Each friend represents a world in us, a world possibly not born until they arrive, and it is only by this meeting that a new world is born."
Anais Nin
From freshman year to now, we know that you have interacted with a number of people in your high school who are different from you and have affected who you are now. Tell us about one such relationship with a close friend, with a focus on the details of your interaction, not the person.
Essay C
Tell us an interesting or amusing story about yourself that you have not already shared in your application. (200 Word Limit)
Essay D
"Music expresses that which cannot be put into words and cannot remain silent."
Victor Hugo
If someone were to look at your music collection right now, they would probably know a great deal about who you are. Individuals are drawn to music, and each song conveys something about that person. Select a musical piece to be your theme song. Tell us what it would be, and more specifically, why it represents who you are. (200 Word Limit)
7.罗格斯新泽西州立大学-新伯朗士威
Required Essay: Rutgers University is a vibrant community of people with a wide variety of backgrounds and experiences. How would you benefit from and contribute to such an environment?
Consider variables such as your talents, travels, leadership activities, volunteer services, and cultural experiences.
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